Wednesday, October 17, 2007

Story Revision

Many helicopters are flying toward the enemy for an attack. Each helicopter has 4 soldiers in it. Bob is so eager for an attack on the enemy, apparently he has been excited for this time to strike back. The piolit gives a 5 minute warning for departure. Bob is the last soldier to leave the aircraft. As the time comes for release of the parachutes, Bob reaches for his and notices he doesn't have it, he looks back up at the plane to realize he left it there. He breaks out into a spasm and searches for items in his backpack for air support. The first thing he pulls out from his back is an umbrella. A smile appears across Bob's face. Seconds later, the umbrella flips upward causing Bob's speed to pick up again, and he loses the umbrella. He searches for another item, reaching for his foot, Bob pulls off one of his socks. As he puts the sock above his head, it fills up with air and slows him down (it looks like a big balloon at this point). All of a sudden the sock tears and sends Bob racing to the ground empty handed at a higher speed. As he sees the ground approaching, Bob hurrys to find another floating device. He grabs a cat from under his helmet and holds its legs above his head to try and float. The cat goes crazy and breaks free from Bob's grip, sending him to to the ground at a faster rate. Bob reaches for another device. He pulls a kite out from his vest. The kite flies up into the air, growing farther and farther away from Bob. The string finally comes to the end and it breaks off, sending Bob free again. Bob makes a big thud on the ground during landing, but is not hurt. As he stands up and wipes himself off, rubbing his eyes, he sees ememies surrounding him at gun point. They ask Bob if he has any last words, and with a sudden shock, Bob gives a sorrow sigh. Seconds later the devices that helped him up in the air come down at a fast speed and knocks the enemies all off their feet! (umbrella punchers the head of one of the ememies, knocking him out. The sock follows seconds later, covering the head of the other ememy. The cat scratches the heck out of another soldier, and the kite pierces another. Bob gives a thankful sigh of relief.

2 comments:

Karly said...

I really like your story, I think it will be really funny to see Bob trying to pull out all these things while flying through the air. I kind of liked your original idea as well. I think it would be funny if at first his parachutte doesn't work so he pulls out all of the items, then when he lands, the parachutte finally deploys and knocks out the bad guys. I really liked that ending...just something to think about! Good job though!

Say_D77 said...

i really like the story. But kinda confuse on how he could pull a cat out of his helmet.maybe he could pull something else out that more relates to you story. I like the ending works well.Is he pulling things out of his bag when he in the plane or when hes falling. good job